Wednesday, 21 August 2019

Show Don't tell sentences

Tell: Serena was shocked.
Show: Jaw dropping, Serena opened her eyes as wide as a golf ball. She tried to say something but all that came out was a small squeal.

Tell: Felicity was excited.
Show: A single tear ran down Felicity's face as she jumped up and down waiting for her dad to come home. She started talking at a faster and higher pace.

Tell: Lidia was sad):
Show: Lip quivering, Lidia's tears formed puddles in her eyes. She trembled and drops of water gushed down her face like a waterfall.

Tell: Emma laughed.
Show: Gasping for air, Emma flopped on to her bed in giggles. She clutched her ribs getting a painful stitch.

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